Editors complain about the overuse of the pronouns 'he' and 'she' and I'm very aware of them after one editor pointed out I had several in a long paragraph. The editor suggested I use more conjunctions. There must be a better way. I think it's too easy to fall into the habit of joining clauses that makes the writing read like a list. When I did a Find on one of my completed stories, I saw clusters of 'she', but in at least one of those sections, I was aiming for emphasis. In two paragraphs I found:
She rolled She watched she stretched, she murmured. she revelled
Since 'she' is the only character in the scene I couldn't use her name. We don't usually think of ourselves by name. I could use rolling, watching, etc, but somewhere in the sentence 'she' would still appear and I need her to act in this way.
It's the same with 'I'. When the 'I' character narrates the scene, describing his actions and reactions, how do you avoid the 'potato effect'? i.e. text with too many eyes.
When reading novels, one begins by studying the prose but if the story is worth reading, one soon becomes absorbed and forgets to pay attention to the details of the author's craft.
In the previous sentence I would have been more comfortable using 'I' instead of 'one'.
Ho Hum, this is one dilemma this writer is determined to overcome.